Hamill, Jack. “Project 3 Essay.” UNEportfolio, draft of paper 3 – Google Docs. Accessed 21 April 2023.

My peer review experience in high school is very different than the peer review we did in this course, and I am grateful for how helpful this course’s version of peer review is because it was extremely beneficial to assisting the revision to my papers. I try not to comment on the little grammar mistakes or MLA formatting errors because I know my peer is most likely aware of those mistakes, but I still note in my feedback letter that they should proofread and pay attention to their MLA formatting. I think it is really important to add as much context as possible, as we have discussed in class, because we need to view our papers from the reader’s point of view, make sure the reader is always aware of and understands the concept. When I commented “you could give examples of the effects or even quote them” because he was very vague when he mentioned the effects Pollan discussed about Americans being less likely to prepare a meal by scratch. I also commented “I would add context that this essay is from the student archives about favorite food essays when you introduce Brett” because he did not introduce his student archive writer. I commented “very long sentence you could split it into 2 and then further elaborate for both” because Jack had some run on sentences so I pointed those out, but I also gave examples as to how he could split them up. I think another important part of giving feedback is complimenting and being positive about their strong points.